Falling down from the motorcycle is the most frightening
incident I ever had. It was the first time I got an accident, and I was
just fourteen at that time. The accident was begun when I started learning how
to ride a manual motorcycle at a spacious green field in my parents’ birthplace
village, Tasik Malaya, with my brother and sister. They were success at the
training. When it was my turn to ride, I felt so nervous because my legs had
not got to the ground yet. Then I rode it very careful until I lost control and
crashed two wooden barriers of the field that separated the field and a dry valley.
My motorcycle was stuck on the two wooden barriers; I fell and bounced to the side
of the valley. I could hardly breathe. I was not much bleeding, but I felt pain
throughout my body. I had thought in my mind “Was I going to die?” Fortunately,
the motorcycle did not fall on me. I could not imagine if it had happened to me.
I probably died. Therefore, I do really grateful to Allah for every blessing
and affection he gave to me; because of his protection, I still can breathe and
live on this magnificent world. That time was the most terrible and frightening
day for me; as a result, I have a bit traumatic about riding a manual
motorcycle.
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Before giving comment on ur wonderful writing, let me tell u that I get difficulty in dragging the cursor to copy ur writing. Fiuuuh, it takes time, dear:-)
Well, it's nice 4 me to read ur title as it's really impressive. It's simple, but it reflects what's in ur writing. As u stated ur TS clearly, a also succeed in developing it by adding some details in ur supporting sentence 'til u come to an end, stating CS. Briefly, I'm glad u write well-developed as well as well written paragraph. I even cannot identify the mistakes here (In fact I check it twice to find it:-)) Keep writing ya. Excellent!
Hhehehe... so sorry y miss...
it caused by the raining stars here right!!
no more worries miss, I already rearranged d layout.. :D
tanx a bunch 4 ur comment n support miss. I can't do that without u, my great lecturer. Wish I could be better n better.. amiin.. (^_^)
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